A Review … Middle of the Road???
August 30, 2013
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After a summer of glowing four and five star reviews on both Amazon and Goodreads, I got a three star review for One Night in Bridgeport today. Here it is in its entirety …
Jack has traveled to a small town (Bridgeport) to deliver papers regarding real estate sales bid. Lea has returned to her hometown from college, but has opted to stay the night at the Bridgeport Inn before going home. The two meet in the bar, Jack buys her a drink and one thing leads to that other thing. Next morning, Jack sneaks out very early in the AM. Unfortunately for Lea who woke up feeling like she’d like a relationship with this man. Her old school friend is now a lawyer, he takes her to dinner, she tells him her life story including the recent one night stand (why would she I ask??) Lawyer Butkis says she’s been raped and should press charges and refuses to believe her when she says she was a willing participant. Case proceeds with no physical evidence – he said/she said. Jack is a very unlikable fellow – he’s kind of skated through life on looks and charm. Lea is pretty but not to bright is my opinion. And a pushover. I only finished it to see how they managed to get to the predictable ending but I’m not gonna tell you how it ends. You can figure it out just like I did – its not difficult. Just not too good. Plus I was wondering about the large spaces between paragraphs, and/or conversation parts – taking up paper space when you don’t have enough of a good story to make it single spaced? Meh
I believe that reviewers should get to speak their mind. To state their opinion. I am perfectly willing to accept three star reviews. Two star reviews. And one star reviews. But I’d at least like them to have some basis in reality, in what the story actually was. I’m not going to pick on the reviewer’s grammar, spelling and punctuation. I’ll let my readers do that. 😉
But come on. Butkus (notice the correct spelling. Oh, wait, I wasn’t going to cover that) didn’t take her to dinner. He took her to lunch. At which time she didn’t say she was a willing participant. She was ambivalent and hurt and pissed off. Jack has skated through his life on looks and charm? Really? Hey, readers of this blog — if you read the book, is that the sense you got of Jack, because it most certainly was not my intent to create that picture.
But the biggest problem with this review is the complaint about “large spaces between paragraphs” and the suggestion that I double spaced things to make up for the lack of a good story. The story was almost 100,000 words, which these days is long compared to a lot of e-published books. I’m going to need to go back to my Kindle and see what the story looks like on it. I do know that I’ve learned since I originally pushed Bridgeport that I should get ride of the page break that begins each chapter in a paperback when I publish it to Kindle, but even with that the comment makes absolutely no sense to me and, ultimately, to me doesn’t belong in a review. It’s like the people who give a one star review to a book because it didn’t arrive in the mail as soon as the reader thought it would.
Regular reader … if you read Bridgeport on your Kindle and thought there was too much white space, let me know.